It was on the short side, i was confused whenit ened so fast. It looked like it had more to it.
The animation style i liked, that sloppy style you used is somethnig i'm a fan of, so that was good, the background would suffice for what you were going for. Nothing to complex. Then it was trying to be funny, but it really did not find it too funny.
It was short and to the point, could use some work.
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I liked what you had done, but i think there could have been so much more put forth.
Your graphics were well done, i like the cartoonish style you are using. The background could use some work since it's a actual picture and not drawn. I think it could have been better if you did the backgroud in the same style as your characters.
thers not to much of a story if there is one at all, but since it's about 10 seconds i don't think so, not to much to say about that. The one voice was great and sounded like you knew what you were doing and the other one was not distinct enough to know what he was saying.
It was good, just way to short.
could use some work
First off, you did good with the audio you had choesn to make a flash around it
Well, it was generaly not to entertaining to say the least. I liked how you showed the mother gettinf aggravated after the father had given the son that gift. But the story was lacking some action.
The animation style was dull and, did not use different shades of color, i did like the style you uesed. It just needed some shading in some places. When you tried to lip-sync with the mother, it was alittle off and could be fixed if you know how.
I have to say it was unique and was something special.
good, but needs work
Well.... i like the idea.
I did like the story/idea of this piece. It has some good potential, but the simple animation was just poor and needed to be much better. The white background and black animation was just simple and i think adding color would be so much better, with variations of the same color.
Not to be a grammer nazi, but it just made it seem so childish and it did not fit. I don't know if thoes were mistakes or done with intention. With the speaker talking in the same mannor, i don't know why you would do this. One of the major flaws of this.
I think you should also spend some time practicing to make your drawings a bit better, maby take a look at the tutorial section of the site.
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THE POINT, YOU ARE MISSING IT
needs to be longer
With claymations i know it takes along time to make since you are taking a photo moving the figure and then taking another photo. It needs alot of work to say the least. The figure needs to be a bit more realistic and maby use some sculpting tools to get a better effect on what you are trying to make.
The music just did not fit with what you made. I liked your choice, but it just did not get along with what you made. It would have to be faster paced to make it work better.
The other point i was getting to is; it's way to short. that was the real problem with this, it needs to be alot longer to have a good submisson on you hands. You got some work to do with this, but if you really try i'm sure it will turn out well.
Well just to start off the graphics were good, just average; could be better. The story was good to start, but it feels like there could have been so much more to it. Maby a intro to it, because it feels like i steped into a movie that already had started and i just walked in. From a all around stand point it was good.
I see the story being almost the same from the 1st to this one almost all are similar, but this is the only criticism i have to make on this because it is perfect in every way.
Unfortunately, any great series will be compared to itself. Your animation keeps getting better and better, with impressive effects. Your audio quality is always superb and consistent, and finally your story recipe ensures a delightful journey.
The most important element of the charlie series is the song of course, and something seemed weaker about this one. Yes, the star fish was hilarious, but this song just wasn't as catchy as the previous 2. Still, making your own original lyrics, music, and animation is a task many on newgrounds don't bother with, so this is a small criticism. The whole project deserves the 10.
This is even better than the first one, well about the same. It's very funny keep it up.
This is quite a good flash for the low score it got, good job.
This movie was hysterical. The voice overs were great, and despite being fairly 'stupid' in some aspects it was done well enough to be very funny. The animation was great, especially for your first flash. It was overall quite good.
You see kids, this is why you should keep Hobos in their boxes.. or else, bad things happen.
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